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A Wish Gone Wrong by Ayooq Fatima

September 16, 2019 By Ayesha Marfani-Muslim Author 4 Comments

Ayooq Fatima is the student if Creative Writing Program by Author Ayesha Marfani. The author conducts online classes for the kids and this is what they have written during the class. The kids also practiced the art of storytelling. This is the original unedited work of the kid.

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Name: Ayooq Fatima

Age: 8 years old

     A Wish Gone Wrong

10 years old Ahmed is in bed he could not sleep he was thinking that when he could play Fortnite. His black shining eyes were dreaming about the game day and night. He was moving his hands in his black curly hair and thinking an idea to play the game. His mind was awake and he could hardly fall asleep. Ahmed looked at the other bed in the room. Ali, his tall and slim brother was in deep sleep. The game belongs to Ali, Ahmed’s elder brother. He did not let Ahmed touch the game. Thoughts were making Ahmed tired now. So he turned the side and closed his eyes.

 

Next day, while coming back from school he was extremely happy. He got an A in maths exam. He went straight to his mother, who was making lunch in the kitchen. He shouted excitedly mom, mom I got an A in maths exam. His mother replied wow you are a wonderful boy. Tell me what do you want to eat, she said happily. Ahmed said I want to eat pizza. His mom said sure I will bake it tonight. He said mom I want a gift. Mom said, what do you want dear? He said I want permission from Ali Bhai to play Fortnite like him. She said sure, I will talk to Ali.

 

At the dinner table, mom asked Ali Bhai if he can share his game with his younger brother. Ali Bhai refused to let Ahmed play that game. He said firmly that he is too small to play the game, he should play football and cricket with his age fellows. Ahmed shouted out loud and threw the plate. The game had taken over Ahmed’s mind. He was furious and hated everything. He was crying loudly, banged the door. All the celebration of his success was ruined.

 

Ali was reading a book on the reading table. Mom came and asked Ali to adjust with his little brother playing the game. Ali said, no it will affect his study and it is not for his age. Kids get easily addicted to this game and it has bad effect on mind and health. Mom said yes I know but he is misbehaving and not letting him play this game will make him worse. I will allow him for an hour after he has done with his studies. I hope you will b kind enough to share your game with your little brother. Ali smiled and said he is not that little and smart enough to make us do for him whatever he wants.

 

After a while, Ali went to Ahmed’s room and said that you can play the game but after your studies and only for an hour. He was so excited. He ran to the PS4, turned it on and played the game for a while.

Then he saw the challenges in the game, after completing one challenge he was curious about the next challenge and couldn’t wait. His mom came to him and said that it has been an hour, you should finish your game now and turn it off.

He was angry, he felt that it has been some while only not an hour.  His mom said look you started playing at 5:00 and now it’s 6:10. He angrily turned off the PS4 and went to his room. At night he could not sleep because he was thinking of the game. Next morning, while eating breakfast he was again thinking of the challenges. Even at school, his mind was occupied with the game characters and graphics. He was thinking of the game day and night. He left playing with his friends. He was hardly taking his meals on time. He was ignoring his health and studies. Once he starts playing it was hard for mom and Ali Bhai to get him to shut down the PlayStation.

One day at school he was going to the class when he fell down and became unconscious. The principal called his father and told him what the doctor at school was saying. The doctor said that Ahmed has a miserable condition of mental and physical health. He had dark circles under his eyes due to poor sleep pattern. He became weak due to not eating proper food. Dad was furious on Ahmed and he was thinking he has to be strict with Ahmed. Now everyone was thinking about what will his father decide.

Next afternoon Dad called a family meeting. Nobody dare to ask a question. It was a huge shame that the whole school witnessed the principal’s complaint against them. Ali Bhai was also angry at Ahmed. Dad gave a long lecture which meant that nobody will raise a single voice against his decision. He announced that he is going to sale PS4 and both the boys will b enrolled in karate and football classes. Dad also warned that they both have to follow the timetable and diet chart he was giving them. Ahmed was sad and ashamed. He was thinking only if he could keep balance in screen time and other activities, may b they don’t have to follow this strict routine. But this episode at school made Ahmed realize that it all happened because of his arrogant behaviour..his best wish gone wrong showed him the harsh reality and now he had to face the consequences.

 

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Filed Under: Words Shaker Tagged With: Creative writing, kids stories

Comments

  1. Aisha says

    September 17, 2019 at 8:14 am

    Very good work and lesson. Ma sha Allah keep writing it will inspire and teach others as well.

    Reply
  2. Ibrahim says

    September 17, 2019 at 9:26 am

    Yaar ayooq aap ko fortnite ka itna pata hai waisay good story I loved it from Isma’s brother Ibrahim

    Reply
  3. Um e Yahya says

    September 17, 2019 at 11:24 am

    MashAllah Ayooq…..u wrote on an important issue ….impressive…u express goid thoughts in effective manner…well done….may u shine on sky…ameen

    Reply
  4. Anam Naeem says

    September 18, 2019 at 6:47 am

    Beautiful, ma Sha Allah…it is such an important issue she had written about…
    I must make my 8 years old boy read it … Fabulous Ayooq!!

    Reply

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